SWA #23

Lily Ronon

Ms. Mikhaylova

March 28, 2012

Essay 4 Outline

Proposal Outline

Title: Solution To Child Obesity

Thesis: Dealing with the problem of child obesity I believe we should deal with the marketing and media side of the issue first rather than school, family and neighborhood changes. Since the media reaches so many children throughout the day and it is something that I feel will influence them the most into making a habit out of eating healthy. Instead of food companies and restaurants spending their money on advertising fattening products, they should target those that are healthier and more beneficial to a child’s everyday diet.

1. The problem of child obesity
1. How it has come about
2. Where the problem exists (home, school, environment)
3. What has been done to solve it thus far
4. Different solutions and how they have worked/ not worked

1. Solution: Changing Market and Media
1. Change the way food is marketed to promote healthy foods as something children want to eat
2. Change the media for commercials and advertisements to include and promote the purchase of healthy foods rather than junk foods
3. Why this is the best option and will influence families and their children

1. Justification
1. Why solution works better than the rest
2. Failures of school and home intervention
3. Best way to reach children in an influential way, the media is a huge part of their lives today and they will easily be benefitted by it

Conclusion: The child obesity problem needs to be solved as soon as possible to keep the younger generations growing into healthy adults. Since the media and marketing businesses influence so many parts of our everyday lives this will be the best way to have children eating healthy.

SWA #22

Lily Ronon

Ms. Mchaylova

March 28, 2012

Essay 4 Draft 1

Proposal Argument Paper

Dealing with the problem of child obesity I believe we should deal with the marketing and media side of the issue first rather than school, family and neighborhood changes. Since the media reaches so many children throughout the day and it is something that I feel will influence them the most into making a habit out of eating healthy. Instead of food companies and restaurants spending their money on advertising fattening products, they should target those that are healthier and more beneficial to ones everyday diet. By changing the angle the media takes towards getting children’s attention we can get messages across that promote healthy eating and exercise as being fun and beneficial.

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The issue in this essay is that of social networking and the use of cell phones and its effect on our everyday lives, positive and negative. The importance is explained through providing background on how much our society has changed since the invention of these websites and smartphones. The 4 perspectives given are that of school professors, children and young adults, the manufacturers and lastly parents. The thesis introduces that the author will explore the positive and negative effects and those in which these products are influencing. The different perspectives are very identifiable. Starting with educators and professors the author explores the positive and negative effects of cell phones and social networking in the classroom. Next the author speaks of young teens and children’s parents view on the situation and how they find them as a distraction. The most important people in this issue, the teenagers, are next in giving their perspective on the issue and lastly the author explores the manufacturers and creators and their view on how their product may be beneficial or distracting. The introduction is effective into leading to the topic by providing background information then has a smooth transition into the thesis which is well explained in the intro paragraph. The author then closes the essay with a well thought out conclusion that reviews all of the different viewpoints. Overall the essay is quite effective, it presents 4 different viewpoints that are very different and very important to the issue of social networking and cell phones in our world today.

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Lily Ronon

English 102-111

March 21, 2012

Paper [3], Draft [1]

Outline: Essay 3

Title: The Solutions to Child Obesity

Thesis: In a world where fast-food and video games on the couch are apart of a child’s everyday lifestyle we will explore the different ways to get children active and eating right, from intervention to environmental changes what is the most realistic solution and which will be the most effective.

1. Background on Child Obesity and why it is a problem in todays society
1. How it has become an issue
2. Life at home
3. School meals
4. How it effects their future

1. Family Intervention
1. Inside the home, the influence parents have on children’s eating
2. Why it has and hasn’t worked
3. Parent bias

1. School Intervention
1. How to get schools attention
2. Involving teachers and school officials
3. After school athletics

1. Environmental changes
1. Sidewalks and playgrounds in neighborhoods
2. Less fast food
3. Community encouragement

Conclusion: The process of solving the child obesity issue will be slow and only effective with a lot of support from communities and families working together to create a brighter healthier future for the children.

3/12 In class work

From the title of Jay Caspian Kangs as the reader I assumed his essay was about the issue of immigration and would explain facts about immigrants in sports. By including "the importance of Ichiro" I assumed he would connect immigrants to the love of sports, but I was not sure how he would make this connection.

The main point the author is making is the sport of baseball creates different ethnic supporting groups when you view it from the outside. The players themselves are seen as equals, team players and apart of their own family. But when viewed as a fan, you can see the problems faced by what is said in the stands, and the racism that lingers beneath the pure fun of the sport. Personas in sports are how fans find their favorite players, their race and nationality play a large part in who they may choose as their favorite player. Though this idea may be over-generalized the author points out how he has faulted in his descrimination and knows he should chose a player based from skill-level and overall play.

If I were to write about sports and calling them "American" I would compare it back to the view on baseball as an American sport and whether or not this author agrees with calling it that. Based from all the different nationalities that make up the players of this sport, and all the countries that play this sport, it may not be necessarily fair to refer to it that way. What makes baseball the "American Sport" and how has it come to be our own? This essay can be used to refer to one mans view on how he has been apart and participated in the racism that makes up our American sports. I would point out how the author knows it is wrong to stereotype but finds himself rooting for those of his same ethnicity. It also gives the perspective of the player and the man rooting for the team, which gives an interesting insight. I could also use this essay as a lead in to the issue of immigration and how immigrant players are benefitting our teams, or based on conflicting views not benefitting, our sports teams.

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Teens and the internet

This topic is very interesting since it concerns all teens today, the internet has become a huge part of our lives. It is how we communicate, receive information, stay in touch with friends etc. But is it taking over our lives in the wrong way? I am planning on researching the pros and cons of the internet, also how they are affected young teens who are using the internet.

http://www.mendeley.com/research/teens-and-technology-youth-are-leading-the-transition-to-a-fully-wired-and-mobile-nation-1/?mrr_wp=0

http://www.kfvs12.com/story/17019016/teaching-teens-safety-on-the-internet

http://www.lsureveille.com/news/university-wireless-internet-usage-spikes-substantially-1.2705255#.T0voA5hc_ww

Clean energy and the environment

This topic concerns not only our nation, but the world. It is very important that we keep our planet healthy. Even though it may not affect our everyday lives today, in the long run how we treat our environment can have some very negative effects. By exploring how people view the environment and what we must do to improve it, i think will be a very interesting research topic.

http://www.businesswire.com/news/home/20120227005299/en/Consumer-Support-Clean-Energy-Declined-Significantly-2009

http://www.zimbabwemetro.com/33072/environment-protection-a-sustainable-development-impasse/

Thousands of dollars missing from SC group

This is the most difficult of my topics to research, since it is local and very recent finding articles on it will be difficult. I find it very interesting to learn about what is happening and how it is affecting the residents of Columbia.

http://www.wistv.com/story/17028095/feds-thousands-of-dollars-missing-from-sc-group

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SWA 13

1. Gender non-conformity
2. Kids being unsure of their gender or wanting to be apart of another gender, and the suffering and abuse they put up with.
3. I support all the children who want to change their gender for it is an expression of their personality. Kids should not be abused by other student just because of their outlook on gender because it can lead to very serious health issues and depression.
4. I would like to research the occurance of these issues in schools, and what people are doing to help or stop it.

http://www.cnn.com/2012/02/20/health/child-gender-nonconformity/index.html?hpt=hp_c1

1. obesity in children
2. Kids becoming obese at very young ages are finding it impossible to lose weight. Their unhealthy eating habits will end up giving them health problems later in life
3. I was never obese as a child but it is very easy to see how children can become obese in america today if their parents do not look out after their eating habits. But i support the change of this in our society, making children eat healthier will improve their everyday lifestyle.
4. I would like to research the meals that are being served in the schools that have a high percentage of obese children. Also research what is being done to change it in these communities

1. paying teens to go to school
2. Kids in bad areas being payed a certain amount each week, which is saved into a bank account that will be payed to them when they graduate. This causes kids to work harder for the money will be very beneficial to them.
3. It is a very interesting topic because there are a lot of kids in America that cannot afford an education and this way they are determined to go to school and work for money to continue educating themselves after high school
4. I want to research how this is working for this school. If students are taking advantage of it and how it will benefit them for the future

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“A Healthy Constitution” by Anna Walters stresses the importance of serving healthy meals in schools. She begins by pointing out how overweight the students are at a school where they are served processed food. However at a school in Wisconsin where the foods are fresh, locally grown foods, the students are healthier and perform better in school. Serving healthy meals is such a quick and easy fix to the problems of health and educational problems. Keeping kids at this school healthy is making them sick less often, while still enjoying and looking forward to their school meals. She brings up the topic of edible education which is bringing the topics of healthy meals, food, gardening etc. into the class room to teach kids where the food comes from and how it is produced. By getting students involved in the preparation of these meals helps them learn responsibility and can feel a sense of achievement when they create delicious meals on their own. Through doing this students can learn values of citizenship, become involved in their communities and with their peers in positive ways. She interviewed kids who spoke of their experiences saying how much they enjoyed being apart of something that they could call their own. Kids are seeing how we depend on farmers for our food, and farmers depend on us to consume, aspects that are necessary for the survival of our nation. She points out how schools should be a place where kids are educated on this process and should become involved. These aspects of our culture, gardens to the kitchens are apart of the values at make up our democracy and Walters believes we need to bring our children to the table and teach them the importance of edible education.

According to Walters food can be used “to teach values that are central to democracy” by connecting kids to our land in ways they never have been before. Land and farming are a huge part of our society that children today know very little about. By learning about where our food comes from and how it is produced we can participate in our communities in more meaningful ways. Walters links healthy meals and learning by relating the obligations that come along with creating your own meals from preparation to cleaning it creates a sense of responsibility. And learning how to cook and follow instructions is a tactic that takes practice and can end up being very beneficial.

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Title: Bad food? Tax it

Thesis: With the number of obese people in America increasing rapidly, something must be done to change our eating habits. With the cheapest food being the unhealthiest during hard financial times Americans must figure out a way to create a healthy affordable diet, to save lives.

Which foods to tax and by how much, explain why

1. Which unhealthy foods are being consumed the most
2. Soft drinks with loads of sugar that are purchased in great amounts by unhealthy americans
3. Fast food restaurants making the purchase of unhealthy meals easy
4. Statistics as to how americans have become over weight

How to fix this, and predictions on how easy it will be

1. 1998 Tobacco settlement and how increasing prices on tobacco slowed down the sales
2. If get people on board for purchasing healthy foods they will... more people purchasing and producing could lower prices
3. The benefits that will come from having healthier citizens eating better foods have a very wide range of benefits from helping pollution from food factories, to lowering health insurance costs for people in the future

How to convince americans to get on board with the change- benefits

1. List of benefits for healthy americans
2. All statistics listed in the article

Conclusion: By implementing taxes on unhealthy foods, it will take away the ease of purchase for Americans hopefully leading them to go for the healthy choices when spending money on food. Improving eating habits will lead to overall healthier Americans.

SWA #9

I read the article “Factory food artificially cheap, bad for your health” by Ethan Huff. The central claim of this article is that the foods that are being produced today are unhealthy and bad the environment. The prices of the foods we purchase in our grocery stores are deceiving since they may be cheap now, but may put a huge burden on our medical bills in the future. Reasons being that farms today are producing foods the cheap and speedy way, rather than the natural safe way. Animals in these farm factories are crammed into small areas causing them to become infested with diseases and feces. Due to these diseases they are injected with hormones and antibiotics that these farmers just assume are the cure all remedy. The author then states, “Compare this to the animals of old that were free to roam the pastures and eat grass and bugs on small-scale, independent farms. Their feces were safely spread on the fields as natural fertilizer in a complementary relationship between animals and land -- as opposed to feces from factory farms that, because it comes from millions of confined animals, has to be disposed of in other ways due to its unsustainable volume” (Huff). Not only are these farms affecting our health, but the land that they reside upon. Our waterways and lands are being contaminated by the fumes and chemicals of these factories and tax paying Americans are beginning see the effects on their bank accounts. Factory farming is an issue that is very much ignored in society today, these issues should be focused on because they reflect the health of the people in our nation, and should not be ignored.

SWA #8

In Matthew Scully’s “Fear Factories” he discusses the issue of factory farming and the cruel ways animals are treated in America today. The first question on page 364 asks how Scully builds and supports his argument that cruelty to animals should be a conservative cause. On page 360 he mentions a website called factoryfarming.com where you can view pictures of these farming factories and the treatment these animals are receiving. The pictures are vile, the animals are injured, bleeding and obviously suffering all for human satisfaction. They are in small confined areas, blocked from sunlight and fresh air and laying in the sweat and urine of the animals surrounding them. The sight is revolting. Scully states, “You wouldn’t think that mean who are unwilling to grant even a few extra inches in cage space, so that a pig can turn around, would be in any position to fault others for pettiness. Why are small acts of kindness beneath us, but not small acts of cruelty?” (360). He proves his argument with the pictures from the website, then leads into why it should be a conservative cause by stating, “Conservatives are supposed to revere tradition. Factory farming has no traditions, no rules, no codes of honor, no little decencies to spare for a fellow creature” (360). I agree with this statement completely, in no way is factory farming fair towards animals, and based from the traditions that conservatives base their beliefs on they should do something to stop it. Scully also mentions how treatment of animals is portrayed in the Bible, which states that there should be mutual relationships between humans and animals. However, Scully mentions in regard to this, “Those religious conservatives who, in every debate over animal welfare, rush to remind us that animals themselves are secondary and man must come first are exactly right- only they don’t follow their own thought to its moral conclusion” (362). Using examples Scully leads the reader into seeing how conservatives have gone against their own morals to support something cruel and unjust.

Question number three asks where Scully stands on the “rights” of animals. Throughout the reading it is very evident that Scully believes that animals should be treated kindly, for they are living creatures just as us humans are and should be respected. He states, “we are told ‘they’re just pigs’ or cows or chickens or whatever and that only urbanites worry about such things, estranged as they are from the realities of rural life. Actually, all of factory farming proceeds by a massive denial of reality- the reality that pigs and other animals are not just production unites to be endlessly exploited but living creatures with nature and needs. The very modesty of those needs- their humble desires for straw, soil, sunshine- is the gravest indictment of the men who deny them” (360). He is stating here his basic beliefs that these animals are basically deprived of all of their everyday needs, simply to feed the desires of humans.

Lastly, we are asked if Scully addresses rebuttals to his claims and if he defends them. He mentions, “factory farmers also assure us that all of this is an inevitable stage of industrial efficiency” (361). This is saying that farmers are claiming that this treatment of animals is only so that they can get the meats produced at a fast pace in order to keep up with our fast paced economy. The crammed farming is only so that the factories can produce the most in the shortest amount of time, totally disregarding the needs of the animals. Scully responds to this by stating, “Leave aside the obvious reply that we could all do a lot of things in life more efficiently if we didn't have to trouble ourselves with ethical restraints. Leave aside, too, the tens of billions of dollars in annual federal subsidies that have helped megafarms undermine small family farms and the decent communities that once surrounded them and to give us the illusion of cheap products. And never mind the collateral damage to land, water, and air that factory farms cause and the more billions of dollars it costs taxpayers to clean up after them” (361). In my mind his statements there completely shut down any sort of rebuttal that tries to make factory farming seem just in any way. Scully’s argument in “Fear Factories” brings up a very important topic that should not be ignored. His writing presents all different sides to the argument while still sticking to his side that it is a very wrong enterprise that simply cares for itself and not the rights of animals.

Essay Concerns

my concerns:
Length
arguments and if they make sense
relating the ads and arguments to my thesis

Lily Ronon

English 102-111

February 1st, 2012

Paper 1 Draft 1

Flipping through any magazine we all know the array of ads that can come on every other page trying to suck us into buying a product. What we don’t think about when we pass over the advertisement is the amount of thought that goes into creating these, in hopes of encouraging us readers to invest in their product. Starting with what advertisements go where, we find that the ads placed in a women’s magazine are going to be different than any ad placed in a mens magazine. This holds true when looking at the two Campbell’s Soup ads I found in InStyle Magazine. One of the ads shows Campbell’s Select Harvest soup which is only 130 calories, while the other shows an ad for Campbell’s Tomato Soup, with a beef taco skillet recipe included. Comparing these two ads we see the same company appealing to different audiences, while promoting the same product.

SW #5

The two ads I chose were both featured in the January 2012 issue of InStyle Magazine. The topics typically covered in this magazine are mostly fashion and beauty advice. They cover the hottest trends, beauty products, home and entertaining ideas. The prospective audience is middle to upper class women who are either working or stay at home moms, looking for ideas for everyday outfits and beauty products to look the best they can be. The magazine can appeal to as young as 18 all the way up to age 50, the products and clothing all appeal to a variety of ages, however the prices are very high. They advertise very high end clothing brands like Louis Vuitton and Chanel, but will also advertise a discount retailer like target. Beauty products that are advertised range can be Olay, Clarins or even Covergirl. They also advertise perfumes, alcohols, food, drinks etc. Based on the advertisements found and the range of products presented in this magazine it is evident the publisher knows its reader to be a trendy spender. They include all sorts of expensive clothing and products, while also tending to advertisements for weight loss. They have the occasional bargain page giving clothes under $100 or $50, however this magazine focuses mainly on big name brands.

SWA #4

1. For this assignment I found the best examples of ads to analyze in the cigarette ads I found. The one cigarette ad is from Lucky Magazine and the other cigarette ad is from GQ Magazine.
2. Lucky Magazine is read by women between the ages of 18 and 50. It gives the fashionista her daily fix of how-to segments to the hottest trends right now. Working mothers, stay at home moms, even young college students can turn to this magazine for the update on what styles are in right now and how to wear them. GQ magazine is the male equivalent of vogue. It gives the middle age man an array of articles from travel to technology and from fashion to food. It hits all aspects of a sophisticated mans everyday lifestyle.
3. The ad i chose from Lucky magazine is the perfect example of how they can sell a cigarette brand in a girly way to appeal to women. What draws attention is the bright pink border that traces around the product, and in swirly letters entice the reader in knowing that this product is “new”. Front and center the product is shown in two sharp black boxes outlined in pink and green. To each side of the boxes is a stem of roses giving it a very graceful feel, classy and old fashioned. Below the boxes in delicate lettering are the words “light & luscious” which are the perfect words to describe the entire ad itself. The background is a dyed pink and champagne color which is very calm and classic. The ad i chose in GQ is themed with red and black. Two very manly colors that seem daring and sophisticated. The box of cigarettes is displayed in a 3D format with the cigarettes seeming to almost pop out of the page at you. The box they are shown in seems to be a red stainless steal box and around it pieces in the shape of the box are being thrown upward, almost as if the box is blowing open. On the top right next to the cursive cigarette brand name in straight letters it says “life is rich”. Overall a very striking classic ad with a modern twist.
4. I chose these ads because they are the perfect examples as to how ads stereotype towards women and men. It is very obvious that the black and red ad is from a mens magazine, while the pink girly ad is from the women’s magazine. They also show the values of the magazines as well, the mens magazine being classy and sophisticated. While the women’s magazine is classy, fun and very girly.

SWA #3

In Chapter One of Writing Arguments there is an image of an elderly man on page seven. He seems to be getting treated with an array of tubes going into his body, a big tube going into his mouth and machines on either side of him monitoring his progress. There seems to be no nurses around him, just his wife casually watching as Jack Kevorkian is projected on the screen announcing that he was released from jail while she says “physician-assisted suicide is just not natural”. This image is obviously strongly opposing the way elders are taken care of in nursing homes. Also, with the announcement of Kevorkian being released from jail it shows not much is being changed to fix the conditions.

The author of this image is using Pathos by showing specific details like the elderly man not being payed any attention to, and the announcement of Kevorkian’s release. This image makes a great impact on the viewer because it is the reality of the situation. People seem too relaxed about the treatment of the elderly, even the body language of the woman sitting next to the hospital bed seems to relaxed for the condition the man being treated is in. She does seem to be saying “physician-assisted suicide is just not natural”, however she seems to be disregarding a man suffering right by her side.

In the reading “What Will Future Generations Condemn For Us” the author points out how elderly today can live independently but are cut-off from their families. Even though we live in such a modern society with the amenities to make treatments easier and more efficient, it seems todays generations do not want to devote the time to their elders.

In personal experience my grandmothers husband was in a nursing home for 2 years before passing away. She struggled everyday with nurses and doctors trying to get the correct treatment for him, and getting them to make her husband a priority. Luckily for her, for a short period of time she could afford to have him treated in her own home. This way she knew he was safe and she could keep an eye on him and the nurse treating him at all times. This is not always the case, not everyone can afford to treat their loved ones in the comfort of their own home. Something must be changed in the system, families must pay more attention and physicians must realize the importance of their jobs and keeping people alive.

Get Smarter response

Get Smarter takes on a very different view of technology and the internet that I have never heard of before. Instead of pointing out all of its negative effects it can have, the author points out that we just have not learned the correct ways to use it yet. By starting off with the example of humans adapting to a new lifestyle after the Mount Toba incident, he leads into how humans today can also adapt to our changing lifestyle as well.

We live in a world that is constantly changing. We crave the newest technology advancement created to make our lives easier and make everyday tasks faster. However as argued in "Is Google Making Us Stupid" these advancements are only taking away from us and rewiring our brains making it more difficult for us to concentrate on tasks and get work done on our own. Comparing that article to Get Smarter I find Get Smarter to have a much more realistic look at technology rather than just complaining about it making life too easy. Technology comes with a whirlwind of possibilities for us for the future, we just have to learn how to use it the right way. I like how the author lead into the discussion about drugs like Adderal and Ritalin. So many disputes have been made about how using these drugs is "cheating" if you are not diagnosed with ADD. However, the author points out how it is no more cheating than it would be having payed for a better education or tutoring. It simply enhances your thinking, it doesn't make you into a super genius magically.

Overall I agree with the author of Get Smarter in that as technology keeps advancing, so do we. As more things change on the internet and in everyday life we just have to adapt to find ways to use them to better ourselves.

My Writing Experiences

I am a freshman transfer from University of South Carolina Upstate. I was accepted for the spring and have been looking forward to coming here for a long time. Last semester in my English 101 class we spent a lot of time doing short papers and rhetorical analysis’. Our focus throughout the semester was on the book How Does It Feel To Be a Problem by Moustafa Bayoumi. The book focuses on five young Arab Americans and their struggles with race in America today.

My greatest accomplishment in last semesters course was definitely when we shifted the focus away from Bayoumi’s book and were able to write a research paper on a topic chosen based on our own interests in controversial topics today. My paper focused on teens and the influence the media has on them. I felt since I was so interested in the topic I could really find good sources about what I wanted to talk about, and then give my input as well.

My best writing experience was in high school when I took the Language of Media class offered by my school. I had a very interesting teacher who gave us fun activities in class to learn about what goes on behind the scenes in the media. For writing in that class we had a lot of opportunities to write what was on our mind. For me writing should be about expressing your own feelings, and this class gave me the chance to speak what was on my mind instead of being assigned what to talk about. My worst writing experiences come from when I am assigned topics to write about that include learning about them first. I have not had very good luck in writing about things that I do not have interest in. I was affected most by my Literature of Media class because I learned how to write my own feelings and that it can be fun, rather than tedious.