Wednesday, March 28, 2012

SWA #22


Lily Ronon


Ms. Mchaylova


March 28, 2012


Essay 4 Draft 1


Proposal Argument Paper


Dealing with the problem of child obesity I believe we should deal with the marketing and media side of the issue first rather than school, family and neighborhood changes. Since the media reaches so many children throughout the day and it is something that I feel will influence them the most into making a habit out of eating healthy. Instead of food companies and restaurants spending their money on advertising fattening products, they should target those that are healthier and more beneficial to ones everyday diet. By changing the angle the media takes towards getting children’s attention we can get messages across that promote healthy eating and exercise as being fun and beneficial.

Monday, March 26, 2012

SWA 21

The issue in this essay is that of social networking and the use of cell phones and its effect on our everyday lives, positive and negative. The importance is explained through providing background on how much our society has changed since the invention of these websites and smartphones. The 4 perspectives given are that of school professors, children and young adults, the manufacturers and lastly parents. The thesis introduces that the author will explore the positive and negative effects and those in which these products are influencing. The different perspectives are very identifiable. Starting with educators and professors the author explores the positive and negative effects of cell phones and social networking in the classroom. Next the author speaks of young teens and children’s parents view on the situation and how they find them as a distraction. The most important people in this issue, the teenagers, are next in giving their perspective on the issue and lastly the author explores the manufacturers and creators and their view on how their product may be beneficial or distracting. The introduction is effective into leading to the topic by providing background information then has a smooth transition into the thesis which is well explained in the intro paragraph. The author then closes the essay with a well thought out conclusion that reviews all of the different viewpoints. Overall the essay is quite effective, it presents 4 different viewpoints that are very different and very important to the issue of social networking and cell phones in our world today.

SWA 20

Lily Ronon

English 102-111

March 21, 2012

Paper [3], Draft [1]


Outline: Essay 3


Title: The Solutions to Child Obesity

Thesis: In a world where fast-food and video games on the couch are apart of a child’s everyday lifestyle we will explore the different ways to get children active and eating right, from intervention to environmental changes what is the most realistic solution and which will be the most effective.


  1. Background on Child Obesity and why it is a problem in todays society
    1. How it has become an issue
    2. Life at home
    3. School meals
    4. How it effects their future


  1. Family Intervention
    1. Inside the home, the influence parents have on children’s eating
    2. Why it has and hasn’t worked
    3. Parent bias


  1. School Intervention
    1. How to get schools attention
    2. Involving teachers and school officials
    3. After school athletics


  1. Environmental changes
    1. Sidewalks and playgrounds in neighborhoods
    2. Less fast food
    3. Community encouragement



Conclusion: The process of solving the child obesity issue will be slow and only effective with a lot of support from communities and families working together to create a brighter healthier future for the children.

Monday, March 12, 2012

3/12 In class work

From the title of Jay Caspian Kangs as the reader I assumed his essay was about the issue of immigration and would explain facts about immigrants in sports. By including "the importance of Ichiro" I assumed he would connect immigrants to the love of sports, but I was not sure how he would make this connection.

The main point the author is making is the sport of baseball creates different ethnic supporting groups when you view it from the outside. The players themselves are seen as equals, team players and apart of their own family. But when viewed as a fan, you can see the problems faced by what is said in the stands, and the racism that lingers beneath the pure fun of the sport. Personas in sports are how fans find their favorite players, their race and nationality play a large part in who they may choose as their favorite player. Though this idea may be over-generalized the author points out how he has faulted in his descrimination and knows he should chose a player based from skill-level and overall play.

If I were to write about sports and calling them "American" I would compare it back to the view on baseball as an American sport and whether or not this author agrees with calling it that. Based from all the different nationalities that make up the players of this sport, and all the countries that play this sport, it may not be necessarily fair to refer to it that way. What makes baseball the "American Sport" and how has it come to be our own? This essay can be used to refer to one mans view on how he has been apart and participated in the racism that makes up our American sports. I would point out how the author knows it is wrong to stereotype but finds himself rooting for those of his same ethnicity. It also gives the perspective of the player and the man rooting for the team, which gives an interesting insight. I could also use this essay as a lead in to the issue of immigration and how immigrant players are benefitting our teams, or based on conflicting views not benefitting, our sports teams.